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What I immediately noticed is that you use very confusing wording. Your sentences are usually simply or compound, with descriptive but ...

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~LittlePoetGirl94

HimHere's to my harvest moon;
Floating beyond a sea of stars.
Bathe me at your rays;
Cleanse me of yesterday.
I'll stand just below;
Assuring your rise.
This beauty burns my soul;
I fail to speak it so.
These eyes see no other;
Captivated as you shine.
Shrunk to my cradle;
I'd rock thee above.
You've brought my light;
As if no other way.
You caught this falling star;
So to you I rise.
Brushed at your side.
I long for your scarlet;
Your colors envelop me.
Above the world;
We soar to no other.
Let them be as it were so;
To know my gem glows on.


Another person has shown me that, even though a writer may break the realms of rhyme and scheme, that the free verse style does not lack imagery and tone. This is another poet who has brought out the most vague images without the use of rhyme, instead with clever metaphor and allusion to images easier and more powerful to visualize. Give her a visit and a watch, because ~LittlePoetGirl94 has topped this weeks entries for a feature, and she deserves it.

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~Red-Rat-Writer 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
I also owe you a custom poem,
so...
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~CelestialEmerel 2 days ago  New member Student Traditional Artist
Thank you for the fave ^^
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youre a nice person, lol
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~AeroModo May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have something important to ask you:

Will you marry me? Just kidding. :XD:

Would you like to work with me on the 'Poetry Album' contest? Thank you.
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~Floating-Upwards May 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Hello,
Just wanted to thank you for the favourite, so thanks. :)
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~KatMyers001 May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for the fave!
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~Ibnik May 13, 2013  New member Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for the fav :)
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~eteey May 13, 2013  New member
Thanks for the fave! Made me a lot happier than i was beforehand :)
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~spider123357 May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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